• helpImTrappedOnline@lemmy.world
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    12 hours ago

    That’s a good idea. The “probably” really is forced. Especially the second one. I think the “punchline” works better if the serious tension isn’t broken early.

    I DM’d you an edit I made, removing “probably”.

    I thought about posting it here, but I don’t think we should get in the habit of editing people’s coimcs to our liking and sharing them, probably.

    • Mooserider@lemmy.world
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      6 hours ago

      I got the same kind of chills I got when I first saw this comic, before I read through the others by the same artist. It feels… Right. Well done! :D